Revison Plans

With peer revisions I realized that I need to work on my paragraphs a little more and describe the scenes a little clearer. Also I need to add more dialog to my story about the bus trip and the bomb threat. This editing has helped me realize what I need to fix. I am planning on adding more dialogs to my essay to get the readers into the story even more and I also am going to add more character into the story. I am going to explain a little more where all we visited so that the readers can understand it a little more.